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Dissonant dreams stream clearly through unconscious minds
Awake, swimming through the ether, living in the smoky haze of hope
Pregnant pauses in the keep of existence, silently praying for the reality realized
The pungent stench of past lovers lingers in the chemical doused sky
Broken wings born from shattered hearts and forgotten promises
The purity defiled
Crippled hands strive to restore each piece with unfamiliar compassion
Distance becomes increasingly evident with each empty breath
The waking hours grow lonely and every night seeming restless
Desperate pleas for liberation from the limbo which entombs mercilessly
Pressure builds in the moment of release
The unstoppable force and the immovable object greet
Lightning crashes and worlds collide.
As shy children, lovers greet one another with unsure casualty.
©2008-2009 ~AmaiSuteneko
:iconamaisuteneko:

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The lost words were found when I wasn't looking for them. From the person I least expected to provide them. How strange?

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:icongedwaylem:
beautiful writing,leads the eyes on a path through the piece,not sure if that makes sense entirely.use of words to weave the imagery is lovely*tips hat*

"Awake, swimming through the ether, living in the smoky haze of hope
Pregnant pauses in the keep of existence"

"Broken wings born from shattered hearts and forgotten promises
The purity defiled
Crippled hands strive to restore each piece with unfamiliar compassion
Distance becomes increasingly evident with each empty breath"

-the parts ilike most
:iconamaisuteneko:
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's something I genuinely enjoyed writing, and your comment was really good. It's rare to get a comment that's more than "good job!", so I appreciate that, especially your input with what you enjoyed about the piece.

--
"So if you care to find me Look to the western sky As someone told me lately: 'Ev'ryone deserves the chance to fly' And if I'm flying solo At least I'm flying free To those who'd ground me Take a message back from me Tell them how I Am defying gravity" -
:icongedwaylem:
*smiling*,try to avoid the simple "good job!" type of responses,they tend to be too...generic.the way i see it if you truely enjoy something then take the time to form a decent response to properly convey that enjoyment.anyways,keep writing and have a good day*tips hat*

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